Question

[1] Thomas Paine, a pivotal figure in the American Revolution, was born in Britain in 1737. [2] When he was in his mid-thirties, he met Benjamin Franklin in London. [3] Franklin helped Paine move to Philadelphia, where he pursued a career in journalism, he became the editor of Pennsylvania Magazine. [4] In 1776, Paine authored a pro-independence pamphlet called Common Sense, which was widely read throughout the colonies.

Which sentence should be revised to improve this paragraph’s sentence fluency?



A.sentence 1

B.sentence 2

C.sentence 3

D.sentence 4

Answer 1

The correct answer is: sentence 3.

Answer 2

Answer: C.sentence 3

In this excerpt, sentence 3 is badly structured. In order to improve fluency, the sentence would have to be rewritten. There are several ways to do this. For example, we could add a transition word that shows the relationship between different ideas (such as eventually or later). We could also separate the sentence and turn it into two separate statements. Making some changes would increase the paragraph's fluency and make it easier for us to read.