Question

I wake up some nights and wish I had you

I need a reason to smile
You were my smile
I tried to be strong
Then what did I do
What have I done
There's no one to keep me warm
At night, when I wake up I wish it was you
Oh my what have I done
All these lonely nights to think
To think about the birds
And the boats
Man it's crazy in my mind without you
And some nights I rule the world
But most night I'm haunted
I feel like I'm falling
It's a deep black hole
And now I'm waiting for you
Baby, I said that I still love you
And you said that doesn't make a difference
You say we are destructive to each other
But don't you see, it's destroying me to not have you




would u change anything about this poem i just wrote and if so what and why?

Answer 1

It sounds good to me!!

Answer 2

I would change the sentences

Baby, I said that I still love you
And you said that doesn't make a difference
You say we are destructive to each other

To

Baby, I say that I still love you
And you say it doesn't make a difference
That we are destructive to each other

Other then that I think it's great. :)