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Identify the problem with the following sentence. Cameron, who has an extreme and unreasonable suspicion of other people and their motives, suffers from paranoia which is a psychological disorder characterized by delusions of persecution or grandeur, was absolutely sure that someone was following him even though he was absolutely alone and hadn't seen a car for miles and miles.

A. use of passive voice
B. wordiness
C. inconsistent style

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B wordiness
It should be more simple
User Ahdee
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I'd say B) Wordiness. They don't just get the point across - instead, they fully explain every detail.
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