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What is the best way to revise the sentence to eliminate wordiness and keep the same meaning?

The wedding of the bride and groom that was held in a local park was interrupted by an unexpected rainstorm, which drenched the wedding party and the guests.

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A The bride and groom of the wedding were drenched in a local park by a sudden rainstorm.

B An unexpected rainstorm drenched everyone in a local park.

C A wedding held in a local park was ruined for the bride, her groom, and their guests.

DA rainstorm interrupted a wedding in a local park, drenching everyone attending.

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C A wedding held in a local park was ruined for the bride, her groom, and their guests.
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Answer:

D. A rainstorm interrupted a wedding in a local park, drenching everyone attending.

Step-by-step explanation:

The sentence "The wedding of the bride and groom that was held in a local park was interrupted by an unexpected rainstorm, which drenched the wedding party and the guests" talks of the wedding that was interrupted by the unexpected rainstorm which resulted in everyone getting drenched. So, the correct way to rewrite the whole sentence, while keeping in mind to not miss any detail, but still retain the whole story is option (D).

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