Question

Which revision makes the tone of the sentence appropriate for a formal e-mail?

A)Please review our suggestion for paving over the muddy area where students wait before school.
B)You know, you should consider paving over the area where we wait before school because it’s gross.
C)Please note our awesome suggestion for paving over the gross area where we wait before school.
D)Paving over that muddy area where students wait before school is obviously a smart plan.

Answer 1

"Please review our suggestion for paving over the muddy area where students wait before school" is the one revision among the following choices given in the question that makes the tone of the sentence appropriate for a formal e-mail. The correct option among all the options that are given in the question is option "A".

Answer 2

A)Please review our suggestion for paving over the muddy area where students wait before school.

Option A has the correct revision for a formal email. It states the topic without using any informal tone or voice. Option B is informal because of the introductory phrase "you now" and the vagueness of the observation "it's gross." Option C is informal due to the words "awesome" and "gross". Option D is informal because of the use of the word "obviously" and "smart".