Question

Rick Allen joined Def Leppard in 1978, and he was in a car accident, and he lost his arm, and he has a special drum set, and he still drums for Def Leppard.

What is wrong with the sentence?


The ideas are not coordinate.
It lacks parallel structure.
It has an incorrect conjunctive adverb.
It has excessive coordination.

Answer 1

The sentence has excessive coordination. 

Answer 2

Out of the following choices, the sentence has only one thing wrong with it. The sentence has excessive coordination. The sentence has to many of the word "and" in it. The sentenced needed to broken down into multiple sentences.