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I came up with this for my essay

The question was-Why should students be encouraged to stay involved in after‐school sports through their high school years?

Essay=

Athletics have been a mainstay of the high school scene for decades. Today, the field has merely expanded, encompassing an even greater variety of competitive options for male and female students alike. While many students get involved in high school athletics for sheer love of the game, there are significant benefits from these extracurricular activities as well. We have 10 ways high school sports benefit students – some of which students and parents may not even realize.







While club sports have become a popular pastime for both students and college recruiters, there is still a lot to be said for playing for your high school team. According to Unigo, students who participate in high school sports learn the benefit of representing their community on the field or court. These athletes learn the fun of team rivalries and revel in the praise of a job well done for their school. This feeling of community and the honor of representing the home team may run over into college athletics if the student advances in his sport as well.




The fitness level of athletes in high school sports programs cannot be underestimated. According to a report from the National Federation of State High School Associations (NFHS), a 2006 study on female athletes found that when female students are given more opportunity to participate in athletics in high school, their weight and body mass improve. A 2001 survey found that students didn't agree they would not spend as much time in sedentary activities like watching television and playing video games if they had other options after school.


Studies also suggest that student athletes are less likely to participate in unhealthy or risky behavior when they are playing sports in high school. The same report by the NFHS cited a 2002 study by the Department of Education that found students who spent no time in burger extracurricular activities in high school were 49 percent more likely to use drugs and 37 percent more apt to become teen parents. Just four hours in an extracurricular activity like sports each week dramatically improved those numbers.



A survey conducted by the Minnesota State High School League in 2007 and reported by the NFHS found that the average GPA of a high school athlete was 2.84, while a student who was not involved in athletics had an average GPA of 2.68. The survey also showed that student athletes missed less school than their non-athlete counterparts, with a total of 7.4 days missed and 8.8 days missed, respectively.

Someone tell me if it is good and if it isnt

Answer 1

I love it! It sounds like an example essay that the school wrote! It has a lot of supporting details, too. But, do YOU think you should add a better conclusion? There isn't really any closing of your essay.

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Answer 2

Hi, this essay is really good and really well written! But I ran it through a plagiarism checker and it says it was partly plagiarized from PublicSchoolReview, which is a website about education. Just be sure to reword everything because if your teacher realizes then they may give you a zero. :( It happened to me last year and it made my grade drop to a C, so just be cautious! :)