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Compare the bold sections of both sentences and then answer the question that follows:

Original: My father disliked sleet, but my father disliked hail more.
Revised: My father disliked sleet, but he hated hail more.

What was done to the bolded section to improve the sentence?

A longer phrase was converted to a single word.
A modifier that did not add meaning was removed.
Redundant phrases were eliminated.
Repetitive words were replaced with synonyms and pronouns.

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The answer is D i took the quiz and got a 100

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To improve the sentence indicated above, the bolded section was changed in this way:

Repetitive words were replaced with synonyms and pronouns.

The sentence becomes better because redundant words were eliminated yet the thought was still preserved concisely and precisely.

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