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I need help editing another poem:

Stop, I know, I feel more than you
Just leave me alone;
I want to run, faster than you
I want to stop feeling emotions
Breaking a heart feeling the tears
I want you to stop
Stop creeping up on me,
Stop doing what you do best,
I only want one of you ;
Happiness, I want you to stay,
Keep me here and alive;
Help me,
But stop…
Leave me to be happy
STOP…

User Hinotf
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Answer

That is a good poem i think its good the way it is

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User Ocodo
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Answer:

I edited it a little bit, but they were so minor becuase the poem looks good already. I just moved some commas and added the ellipsis at the end after happy. Peoms are so free with writing, it's hard to edit them.

Step-by-step explanation:

Stop, I know, I feel more than you

Just leave me alone;

I want to run faster than you

I want to stop feeling emotions

Breaking a heart feeling, the tears

I want you to stop

Stop creeping up on me,

Stop doing what you do best,

I only want one of you ;

Happiness, I want you to stay,

Keep me here and alive;

Help me,

But stop…

Leave me to be happy...

STOP…

User TwiggedToday
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