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Hi, can you correct this conclusion for my essay (structure/voc./gramar/ponctuation ...) :

To sum up, although there are two sides to a coin , I believe that mobile phones generally do improve the quality of our life and I'm concerned that those multi-tools should be used worldwide nowadays. And in my estimation, the pros outweigh the cons.

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To conclude my statement, even though there may be two sides a coin, I believe that cellular devices, such as mobile phones, do in fact improve the quality of life as we known it. However, I am concerned that in this day and time, those multi-tools should be used worldwide. And in my calculations, the pros exceed the cons.
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