Question

Can someone please help me with this?!!

Revise the paragraphs below by combining sentences, fixing faulty parallelism and coordination, and correcting other sentence faults such as fragments and run-ons.

Answer 1

Looks good revisions below

Step-by-step explanation:

Ok so you say State House twice in the first sentence, so maybe you could try using other words.

You also say, "Now known as the Liberty bell." And you say it right after saying that we call the hall Independence Hall, so say something like:

'And now, we call the bell, Liberty Bell.'

Put a comma after Pennsylvania Assembly. (First paragraph Fourth Sentence)

When you say "It would right to call lawmakers to meetings." Did you mean ring?

In paragraph 2, connect sentences 4 &5.

Otherwise it looks really good! You got good skill!!!

Hopefully that helped!