Question

Read the sentence.

Many people watched the sunset.

Which is the best way to revise this sentence using descriptive detail and sensory words?

Several people had gathered to observe the pretty sunset that evening.
Yesterday evening, the colorful sunset was seen by a large group of people.
At sunset, the crowd watched the sky fill with shimmering bands of amber and gold.
At evening, many people viewed the beautiful sunset and enjoyed its lovely colors.

Answer 1

My vote is on:

At sunset, the crowd watched the sky fill with shimmering bands of amber and gold.

its "pretty/colorful/beautiful" against THIS ^^^^

Answer 2

The correct option is: At sunset, the crowd watched the sky fill with shimmering bands of amber and gold.

Step-by-step explanation:

Even though all sentences describe people gathering to watch a sunset, the best choice when taking into account the use of descriptive detail and sensory words is the third one. The description of a crowd, the time of the day(sunset), the mention of the sky and its colors(amber and gold) and the description of the shimmering effect of the lights all contribute to portraying a vivid and familiar image of a colorful sunset. Compared with plain descriptive words like pretty, colorful, or beautiful, as the other options offer, this description does a much better job at resorting to description and sensorial effect.