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Rewrite the following extract, putting in the dashes, exclmation marks, question mraks, colons and semi-colons and paragraphs.

Brittany thought it was best she gkt it over with. "I have something to say, shannon. I am the one who told Toby that you liked him.'' shannon's eyes widened and her cheeks flushed red. "what. you did what.'' i'm sorry .i thought i was helping. you see," Brittany stammerd. "i overheard him on the bus talking. to these two guys saying how much he liked you and didn't know who you were and i well i thought that it wouldn't hurt to say so i said." Brittany's hands were sweaty she felt a little dizzy with fear. shannon was going to be so mad. "how dare you. You cow. You you oh," and sbannon began to cry

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Brittany thought it was best she get it over with, "I have something to say, Shannon. I am the one who told Toby that you liked him.'' Shannon's eyes widened and her cheeks flushed red, "What? You did what!?'' "I'm sorry! I thought I was helping, you see," Brittany stammered. "I overheard him on the bus talking to these two guys, saying how much he liked you and didn't know who you were, and I ,well, I thought that it wouldn't hurt to say, so I said." Brittany's hands were sweaty; she felt a little dizzy with fear; Shannon was going to be so mad. "How dare you, you cow! You, you, oh!" and Shannon began to cry.

Or alternatively (with a few changed words to make it flow a little smoother):

Brittany thought it was best that she get it over with, "I have something to say, Shannon. I am the one who told Toby that you liked him.'' Shannon's eyes widened and her cheeks flushed red, "What? You did what!?'' "I'm sorry! I thought I was helping, you see," Brittany stammered. "I overheard him on the bus talking to these two guys, saying how much he liked you and didn't know who you were, and I ,well, I thought that it wouldn't hurt to say, so I said it." Brittany's hands were sweating and she felt dizzy with fear; Shannon was going to be so mad! "How dare you, you cow! You, you, ugh!" Shannon began to cry.

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