Question

Look for comma splices and fussed sentences.

Dear Ms. Smither,

Thank you for speaking with me about the position of Accounts Payable Manager, I Enjoyed meeting with you and the members of your team I am excited to work with such a great team. This job fits my qualifications I work independently and am a self starter. I feel strongly that i will be a great contributor to your firm I hope that you agree. Thank you for your time and consideration I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,

William R. Jones

Answer 1

I believe it would be:

Dear Ms. Smithers,

Thank you for speaking with me about the position of Accounts Payable Manager. I enjoyed meeting with you and the members of your team, and I am excited to work with such a great team. This job fits my qualifications as I work independently and am a self starter. I feel strongly that I will be a great contributor to your firm and hope that you agree. Thank you for your time and considerations. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,
William R. Jones