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Can someone check if what i wrote so far makes sense and if i made a mistake.

Can someone check if what i wrote so far makes sense and if i made a mistake.-example-1
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It looks great, except, I would rewrite the first sentence as "Everett knew it was dangerous to be within close proximity to a cheetah". Also, in the second sentence, I would get rid of the words "at the moment". They aren't really necessary. That's all. Everything else looks perfect. Good job introducing the subject, by the way.
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I don't really know what it's about but everything looks okay to me. There might be some mistakes on the last sentence but i'm not completely sure.
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