Question

HELP 30 MINUTES UNTIL THIS IS DUE

Read the following paragraph.

I believe that the “Read Books, Share the Love” advertisement effectively uses the association technique to convince people to read more books. The advertisement targets parents who perhaps could easily associate the children in the picture with their own children. In the ad, a mother and father are reading a book to their two young children. It seems that this has a positive connotation of intimacy and love. Maybe the image implies that reading is not just intellectually beneficial, but that it creates a closer bond between parents and their children. Because of this association technique, parents are persuaded to read to their children. Most parents certainly would want their children to do well academically and feel loved at the same time. Therefore, this ad effectively encourages literacy.

Which revision would most likely improve this paragraph?
A) a better explanation of the target audience
B) the elimination of passive language
C) more specific details from the ad
D) a comprehensive topic sentence

Answer 1

I think it's A. but let someone else answer or do some research

Answer 2

The passive language can create vague ideas if is not use properly, for example in the sentence “It seems that this has a positive connotation of intimacy and love.” A positive connotation for who, the passive language here does not include the actor. To improve this paragraph should be reviewed the elimination of passive language. The answer is B.