Question

[1] The 1992 Olympic Games took place in Barcelona, Spain. [2] This marked the first year that professional basketball players were permitted to represent their countries in the games. [3] Previously, only amateur players were allowed to participate such as college athletes. [4] The US squad was called “The Dream Team” because it consisted of some of the best players in the history of the game, including Michael Jordan, Magic Johnson, and Larry Bird.

Which sentence should be revised to improve this paragraph’s sentence fluency?

Answer 1

The third sentence should be revised. This is how you could fix it: "Previously, only amateur players, like college athletes, were allowed to participate." This helps the sentence to flow better, and the writer is now speaking the active voice.