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What is the BEST way to revise this sentence so that it conveys clear, concise ideas and does not change the meaning of the sentence?

The financial aid advisor spoke to our class yesterday. She said that all qualified students should apply to college.

A) All students should apply to college. The advisor spoke to our class yesterday.
B) The advisor spoke to our class yesterday. All students should apply for college.
C) The financial aid advisor gave us some really good advice when she spoke to our class yesterday.
D) The financial aid advisor, who spoke to our class yesterday, said that all qualified students should apply to college.

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I think D is the best sentence 
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Answer:

D. The financial aid advisor, who spoke to our class yesterday, said that all qualified students should apply to college.

Step-by-step explanation:

The last option best exemplifies the message conveyed in the statement. This option clearly portrays the desired idea without altering the meaning of the sentence. The statement aims to convey the message of the financial advisor who spoke to the class yesterday to suggest all the qualified students to apply to college and this meaning is best depicted in this option without any alteration. The rest of the options are either unclear or insufficient to deliver the exact message of the financial advisor.

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