Question

Tejas decided to rewrite the sentence

The crowd yelled, and they jumped up when the buzzer went off.

as

When the buzzer sounded, the cheering fans leaped to their feet in excitement.

Was Tejas correct in making the revision?
A) No, because the new sentence is much too long.
B) Yes, because the new sentence adds vivid language.
C) Yes, because the new sentence is longer than the first.
D) No, because the new sentence is not as clear as the firs

Answer 1

B

Step-by-step explanation:

Neither A or C sounds correct (process of elimination). So that leaves B and D. Now given from what you learned in school, your teachers should tell you to put as much details in your writing as possible. Looking at B, that's exactly what Tejas did. HOPE THIS HELPED!

Answer 2

B. When Tejas rewrote the sentence he made it more concise. The sentence is now shorter. It's meaning is understood better. The new, revised sentence has a better flow than the original sentence. In the revised sentence we can see that the crowd leap up because the buzzer sounded. In the original sentence it isn't as clear.