Question

read the paragraph from a student’s critical analysis essay. in the declaration of independence, thomas jefferson states his thesis, which makes it seem important that the colonists get independence next, jefferson gives evidence against the king of england and how he mistreats american colonies. finally, jefferson suggests that colonists should stop paying taxes and fight, which is the obvious answer to the colonists' problems. what is the best way for the student to revise the essay

Answer 1

In my opinion the best way for him to revise this essay it to double check his spelling and make sure his punctuation is correct and that he is capitalizing and spelling everything correctly.

Answer 2

Answer: Since the student is writing a critical essay, he/she should not just summarise the work, but also evaluate it.

Explanation: Just to elaborate a little on the answer, it can be added that the goal of a critical essay is to evaluate somebody's work, in this case the U.S. Declaration of Independence, and, consequently, to make it more understandable. A critical essay is, therefore, subjective, since the author is giving his/her opinion of a text. This student has done the analysis - he has identified some of the main ideas of Jefferson's thesis - but he has neglected to identify the purpose of the text and to evaluate Jefferson's success in reaching that purpose.