Question

I need help with grammar. please fix edit this for me.

1. For how long have you been playing roblox?

about 5 years

2. For how long have you been in the Star Wars Genre?

long time

3. What are your experiences of a leadership role?

Commanders

4. Why are you wanting to become an Officer?

To help the group, to help get activity up, to help make people better with combat and honor.

5. What are your strong traits?

Leader ship, Combat, training people, giveing and receving commands.

6. What are your weak traits?

Aiming, thats really.

7. Do you have any additional skills that might benefit the Republic? Such as building/scripting?

No.

8. How would you react to a person breaking the rules?

Telling them that they need to follow the rules. and if they don't get back up, I only use admin if I have to.

9. Have you read the information document?

Yes.

10. Generally explain yourself in one paragraph.

I'm nice, fun, touph when I have to be. I don't AA, I help if I can, active. I don't give up easy. I fight until we it's over. I try to make stuff fun.

Answer 1

5 years on me, maybe 6.

Answer 2

1. About five years. (Add capital letter at the beginning of the sentence and a period at the end. It is best to spell out the number as well, rather than typing "5")

For 2 and 3, I would suggest you elaborate a bit further. Perhaps saying "A long time, I started when..." and when you ask about the commander role, explain a bit about what that is.

I think 4 and 5 are written well enough to be left the way they are.

6. Go into a bit of detail about why aiming is difficult.

7. Instead of saying "no", perhaps add some emphasis. Such as: "Nothing else that I can think of," for example.

8. Begin the second sentence with a capital letter and do not start with the word 'And'. "If they do not get back up, I only use admin if I need to." Would be a better sentence :)

10. Perhaps elaborate on what the person means by the traits he has listed and ask about how he makes things fun.

I hope this was of some help to you!!