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Which short narrative would be the most appropriate style and tone for the personal essay section of a college application?

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#1 is too vague and casual. #2 uses slang that wouldn't be used in a college application. #3 uses dated wording.

This leaves us with #4, which offers a personal reason for volunteering ("my grandfather had a heart attack") and is overall written formally. Thus, this would be the most appropriate style and tone for such an essay.
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