Theodore Roosevelt was the greatest president because as a leader of the Progressive Party, he brought about much-needed social, political, and economic reform. He broke up many large business trusts. He took economic power out of the hands of the wealthy and powerful corporations and placed it in the hands of the ordinary people. Theodore Roosevelt’s reform policies, known as the Square Deal, helped to give the average citizen an equal share of opportunities.
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