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Rewrite the following to show rather than tell.

The crazy old woman felt bad. She sat on the bench and held her purse in her lap.

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The crazy old woman felt bad as she sat on the bench holding her purse in her lap.
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She sat on the old wooden bench, clutching her purse tightly in her lap, the crazy old woman felt bad, as she looked at the ground. 
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