Question

Revise the passage below so that it maintains a formal style and tone throughout.

Passage
Most fine arts classes, including visual art, music composition, dance, theater, and
creative writing, feature a peer-review component in which students provide feedback on
their classmates' work. Some art teachers maintain that peer review is a valuable
teaching tool that not only helps student artists reimagine their work but also pushes
student critics to develop their taste and technical vocabulary. The thing that's wrong
with this is that sometimes people give really lame feedback and don't get how to be
nice. When that happens, feelings can be hurt, and the peer-review process can become
unproductive.

Answer 1

Most fine arts classes, including visual art, music composition, dance, theater, and creative writing, feature a peer-review component in which students provide feedback on their classmates' work. Some art teachers maintain that peer review is a valuable teaching tool that not only helps student artists reimagine their work but also pushes student critics to develop their taste and technical vocabulary. The thing that's wrong with this is that sometimes people give really ineffective feedback and don't get how to be gentle. When that happens, feelings get hurt, and the peer-review process can become unproductive.