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Do you think this poem is bad? Your smile brightens my day I love you Casey McMenamin with all my heart sitting here at my desk thinking about you i wish it could be you and me that would make me happy
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Do you think this poem is bad?

Your smile brightens my day

I love you Casey McMenamin with all my heart
sitting here at my desk thinking about you
i wish it could be you and me
that would make me happy
to share feelings with you at my desk

User Luger
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It's not bad . Personally I would change a few things , but i like it. Is this for an assignment or for personal use?
User Sosily
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it's pretty good,
instead of saying 'I love you Casey McMenamin with all my heart' you could just begin the poem with 'Sitting here at my desk thinking about you'
but if you feel you like your version better then go for it
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