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Anthony is taking Denise for a ride in his new car. He moves fast down the highway. Suddenly Denise says, “Look out!” A truck moves into their lane, right in front of them. Anthony puts his foot on the brake-hard. The car goes first to the right, then to the left. “Don’t use the brake!” Denise says. Anthony takes his foot off the brake and gets control of the car. “We’re safe,” Anthony goes to Denise.
Rewrite:
Anthony is taking Denise out for a ride in his new car. He drives fast down the highway. Suddenly Denise screams, “Look out!” A truck shifts into their lane, right in front of them. Anthony slams his foot on the brake; hard. The car swerves first to the right, then to the left. “Don’t use the brake!” Denise shouts. Anthony takes his foot off the brake and regains control of the car. “We’re safe,” Anthony says to Denise