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Is this a good start for a research paper about zoos?

Do you like zoos? Well some people do and others don’t. In fact some people wonder if the wild is better for animals. Others believe that zoos protect and preserve the homes and lives of animals. In this paper I would like Zoos can be great places to go when your family wants to have some fun.

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that is great.but you forgot to add some punctuation marks and commas add a punctuation mark at the end of the sentence.
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That is a great start but erase the part where you wrote in this paper it sounds better without saying that part
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