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Any critiques I need on my essay ?

Any critiques I need on my essay ?-example-1

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Answer: You should try to use stronger word and don't repeat about how she is loyal or always stays with you more then once. You should always express you feeling about when you're with her. Lastly, try putting another time when something happen so another personal experience with your dog. I hope this helps :)

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