107k views
3 votes
Read the sentence. She met her friends in the lobby, the bottom floor, of the hotel so that they could head over to the refreshing pool for a cool, brisk swim. Which is the best revision of this sentence?

2 Answers

3 votes
She meet her friends on the bottom floor of the hotel and they went to the pool for a swim
User Hwen
by
6.3k points
6 votes

The options are as follows:

A. She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim.

B. She met her friends at the hotel’s bottom floor, which is the lobby, so that they could head over to the swimming pool for a cool, brisk swim.

C. For a cool, brisk, refreshing swim at the hotel’s pool, she met her friends in the hotel’s lobby on the bottom floor.

D. The sentence is correct as written.

The best revision for the sentence is A, "She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim."

It is not necessary to add that the hotel lobby is on the bottom floor. It doesn't add anything of value to the sentence and makes the sentence less readable.

User Frank Denis
by
7.6k points