Question

Spencer needs to revise his essay to use a more formal tone.

One cool fact I found studying Greek mythology is the connection to modern names. For instance, my hometown, East Sparta, Ohio, is named after the home of the awesome Greek warriors!


Which revision of Spencer's essay best uses a formal tone?


A. One interesting fact I found studying Greek mythology is the connection to modern names. My hometown is East Sparta, Ohio, which is named after the home of the fierce Greek warriors.

B. Isn’t it interesting how Greek mythology connects to modern names? East Sparta, Ohio, for instance, is named after Sparta in Greece, which you know is home to the strong Greek warriors.

C. An interesting fact about Greek mythology is its connection to many modern names. One example is East Sparta, Ohio, a town that takes its name from the home of Greece’s famous warriors.

D. Have you noticed how many modern names come from Greek mythology? I didn’t know until now that my hometown, East Sparta, Ohio, is named after the home of some very fierce Greek warriors.

Answer 1

Your answer is C.

Step-by-step explanation:

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Answer 2

The revision which uses a formal tone is the following one:

C. An interesting fact about Greek mythology is its connection to many modern names. One example is East Sparta, Ohio, a town that takes its name from the home of Greece’s famous warriors.

Step-by-step explanation:

If you want to achieve a formal tone, you cannot sound as if you were simply having a casual conversation, asking questions like: "Isn’t it interesting how...?", or "Have you noticed how...?". Plus, you cannot express yourself in first person singular, that is, by using the pronoun "I", as in: "One interesting fact I found...", and "I didn’t know until now that...". If you want to sound formal, you must be neutral about what you talk or write about, which means you should not use a familiarity tone.

All of that being said, letter C is the way to go, since all that should be avoided at all costs when seeking a formal tone is present in the other alternatives. In fact, letter C is an example of written formality: it sounds serious, third person singular is used the whole time and there is no display of familiarity or overexcitement whatsoever.