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Why is this better than saying, 'smoke from the collapsed buildings filled the air'?

Even when they made it around the corner, away from the center of the wreckage, the haze of the collapsed building attempted to follow. It was white and warm, and it crept behind them.

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I think it's better because it's shorter and gets to the point immediately

Hope this helps

~ Jordan ~
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