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Read the sentence and answer the following question:

I have many beliefs about how the traffic light system could perform better.

Which revision would make this sentence more precise?

I believe small changes to the timing would improve this traffic light system.
I have some changes that I believe would make the traffic light system work better.
If the traffic light system can be addressed, I have some ideas that would make it better.
The traffic light system would perform better if my beliefs were heard.

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The revision that will make the sentence more precise is this: I HAVE SOME CHANGES THAT I BELIEVE WOULD MAKE THE TRAFFIC LIGHT SYSTEM WORK BETTER.
This sentence is more precise, because it gives accurate information about the intention of the speaker. The original sentence was a little bit confusing because of the word choice of the speaker but the revised version chose the right words to express the speaker's intention.
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