Question

Retype these sentences, making them smoother by changing they parts that área italicized.

1. Mary gave us an advance warning that she was going to set a new récord for reading the most books.
•Advance warning and new récord is italicized.

2. With the exception of Tom, together with two others, we all enjoyed the concern.
•With the exception of, and together with is italicized.

3. I am not going to play softball up until next Wednesday.
• up until is italicized.

Help please.

Answer 1

1. Mary gave us *a warning in advance* that she was going to set a *record* for reading the most books.
(advance warning could also be changed to "advanced warning", and 'new record' is redundant because anything that is a record is already going to be new. )

2. *Everyone except Tom and two others* enjoyed the concern.
(this helps shorten the sentence and take the focus off Tom and the two others, making it clearer that the majority enjoyed the concern)

3. I am not going to play softball *until* next Wednesday.
(the up isn't necessary, it adds words and takes away some of the clarity)