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My family and I got in the car one day when I was around one year old and headed to the beach for a nice vacation. Once we arrived there, we began putting down our belongings and relaxing for a bit on a towel. Then, we tried to find something do there. After, we played in the sand and made some wonderful looking sandcastles, although they didn't turn out that well when we finished. It was such a great time! We had a blast! "Let's go in the warm water," Dad said as we headed toward the refreshing water.

In the cool ocean water, we splashed around and played with each other. After a short while, my dad filmed a video of me strolling along the sand with my mom. Then, we played more in the sand and enjoyed the time at the beach. We relaxed a bit more on our towels and walked on the warm sand heading towards something else to do. After sitting under the hot sun, a bit more, we walked close to the ocean water one more time. It felt so refreshing and made the hot weather feel better.

Then, we saw this nice lady who was building a cool looking sandcastle by herself. I became interested in her work and ran over but I accidentally knocked over one of her sandcastles. It was our fault, and when we apologized to her for our mistakes, she said to us that she was okay with it, and it was alright. I started playing with the sand from the now demolished sandcastle that was knocked down and had a lot of fun. After we talked to the woman, we left the sandcastle alone and started getting ready to go back home when my parents said, “It’s time to head home now!”. We packed and gathered up all our belongings and headed to the car to get back home. It was so much fun while it lasted, maybe we should go again for another beach trip.

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My family and I got in the car one day when I was around three years old and headed to the beach for a nice vacation. Once we arrived there, we began putting down our belongings and relaxing for a bit on a towel. Then, we tried to find something to do there. Afterwards, we played in the sand and made some wonderful looking sandcastles, although they didn't turn out that well when we finished. It was such a great time! We had a blast! "Let's go in the warm water," Dad said as we headed toward the refreshing water.

In the cool ocean water, we splashed around and played with each other. After a short while, my dad filmed a video of me strolling along the sand with my mom. Then, we played more in the sand and enjoyed the time at the beach. We relaxed a bit more on our towels and walked on the warm sand heading towards something else to do. After sitting under the hot sun a bit more, we walked close to the ocean water one more time. It felt so refreshing and made the hot weather feel better.

Then, we saw this nice lady who was building a cool looking sandcastle by herself. I became interested in her work and ran over but I accidentally knocked over one of her sandcastles. It was our fault, and when we apologized to her for our mistakes, she said to us that she was okay with it, and it was alright. I started playing with the sand from the now demolished sandcastle that was knocked down and had a lot of fun. After we talked to the woman, we left the sandcastle alone and started getting ready to go back home when my parents said, “It’s time to leave now!”.

After we left the beach, my parents said, “Would you like to get some lunch?” Of course I was going to say yes, we had just had the best time at the beach and nobody can turn down some amazing lunch. For lunch we ended up going to the best restaurant ever, Applebee’s. However, my dad ate something bad and ended up throwing up. He ran to the bathroom and we thought he was just being a goofball, but when he got back he looked horrible. He shortly suggested that we go home, we were all stuffed anyways.

After we got home dad did what anybody would do and ran straight to the bathroom, my mom and I looked at each other and giggled. Shortly after my dad was done he sat on the couch and watched tv while getting some rest. My mom suggested that she and I go out and do something, so we went on a scavenger hunt. We had tons of fun together trying to find this prize at the end, and when we finally completed it and found the prize it was a- before my mom said, “Let's start going home now, get your things i’ll meet you in the car!” When we got home dad made his famous meatloaf because he was already feeling better, and so we sat at the table eating his meatloaf and talking about everything that happened that day. It was the best day ever.

Im sorry too change some details but I did it so I could write more, I really hope this helps and the total comes out too be 549 words!

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Answer: You could add how the ride was, what sights you saw and stuff like that and you can add how the ride back home was. Add a paragraph on what your favorite thing you did while you were at the beach.

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I hope this helps.

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