Question

Can I get some feedback on this poem? I need to present something. I also need help with coming up with a title.

I'm a girl nobody likes
I fail at everything even though I try
I'm a weak person that wants to cry
But there are no tears left
It wasn't my tears that shed but my heart instead
Thoughts of darkness screw with my head
I'm painfully aware that I'm alive
The scars help but they've got to hide
I might get stuck in a hospital, stuck in a lie
Who are they to tell us that it's alright?

Answer 1

I really like this, I take it to heart. As for a title... idk. Titles are hard to think of! "It's Alright" ??? Something vague like that lol

Answer 2

I like the poem. it's very honest and personal. if you actually feel that way I'm sorry. no one should ever have to feel like that. don't let the bad outweigh all the good. and I think you should title it "dark rain cloud" or "I'm fine" cause alot of people say I'm fine when they aren't. idk hope this helped