Down below is an essay I wrote about an adversity how I overcame it, and what it taught me for a high school essay. For 30 points can I get your opinion on it?
April 18th, 2018 was when my world came crashing down. My hero, my role model, passed away and I called him dad. Every female holds a special place in her heart for her father and mine continues to grow. I try not to hold onto the constant emptiness I feel for losing him. I believe I should rejoice in the happy memories he left me and my family with. However, this is the first time I’ve lost someone I unconditionally love. So it’s hard. It’s hard to accept the fact that he’s gone and he’s never coming back. If I could, I’d do anything to go back in time and spend another moment with my dad. I regret the times I’d stay in my room doing nothing and not having a conversation with him. What hits me the most is that he’ll miss the moments that I’ve always wanted to experience with him; my first volleyball game, graduation, entering high school, and the rest of my life ahead of me. I remember when I held my father’s hand and I felt that I’d never be safer. He was my knight in shining armor, my hero, my protector. He’s gone and now I’ve got to protect myself. My dad taught me how to be strong and I want to carry on his legacy. I’m proud to say that he was my father. With time and strength I’ll be able to overcome this adversity but, the wound is still fresh. I know, I’ll never get over this, but people say it gets easier. The lasting impact my father has had on me ensures I’ll never forget him and I’ll always miss him. This has taught me that life's an unexpected ride and you don’t know what’ll happen on the next turn.You’ve got to be prepared for the worst and best moments of your life. I’m on the chapter in my life where I’m going to high school. As I embark a path to my dream school, Beacon High School, I’ll find out if life takes me in that direction. If it does, I’ll make sure I excel. I’ll excel in my studies and focus on my education like my dad has always wanted and valued. My father always wanted what’s best for me and I know he’d be proud of me at this very moment. Now I’m awaiting the next turn which is whether or not I get into this high school. My guardian angel, my dad, will always be watching me from above and I know he wants the best future for me. I hope I’m on the right path to a successful future by applying for this school.