Question

HEY pls help

After a while, Sarah and her grandfather got their lives together and Sarah applied for multiple jobs to help out her and her grandfather. After all, Sarah was 15, going on 16, and was becoming a young adult.

I kinda put a little too much "after" in this paragraph. Can anyone help me get rid of that and replace it with something better? TY

Answer 1

After a while, Sarah and her grandfather got their lives together and Sarah applied for multiple jobs to help out her and her grandfather. Ultimately, Sarah is 15, going on 16, and was becoming a young adult.

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Answer 2

Sarah and her grandfather eventually got their lives together, which prompted Sarah to apply for multiple jobs, allowing for even more support for the duo.

I dont think the second part is particularly neccesary, as it kinda contradicts the first half of the paragraph- which says that Sarah needs a job for added support, but the second half seems to say Sarah needs a job because she is growing up.

Also, most places wont hire anyone until they are 16.