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Hi! Can somebody right me an opening line, to start my story? The beginning starts with a burning building, with a father and son stuck inside. The father is a vampire, and he's going to bite his son so he could live for eternity. After he bites the boy, the building collapses, killing the father & sparing the young boy.

Thanks in advance.

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Ch. 1: Embers

It was over. His metamorphosis was complete. The once-human boy was crouched in front of the burning house. His still form was illuminated by the crackling flames that ate hungrily away into what remained. There he sat, with wide eyes, watching the only home he'd ever known be reduced to a pile of ash. The boy's expression was distant. Emotionless. With a crackling sigh, the last of the beams keeled over, and the house collapsed in on itself. The wave of heated air blew forward into his face and tousled his hair. He didn't blink. Or move. His father's last words echoed sharply inside his heart. And he knew that this night would stay with him forever.

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