Question

I need help PLEASE. Please let me know if I am on the right track with this.

this is the assignment
1. Describe a goal for interpersonal improvement in your personal life. Be sure to explain the following:

• What aspects of your own interpersonal communication skills would you like to improve?
• How far are you from attaining this goal?
• Do you think this goal is set too high or too low? Why, or why not?
• How long will it take me to attain this goal?
• If the goal will take a long time to attain, could you set smaller goals that you could attain while still working toward your bigger goal?
• How will you benefit from successfully attaining your goal?


This is what I have so far


My goal is to do the very best I can do in my classes so I can pass this course. My goal is very realistic and can be achieved. All I need to do is keep that in my mind and have a little more confidence in myself. I need to improve on when I don’t understand something not to be so afraid of asking for help when I need it. I also need to improve on learning to use the library and the tutoring help that Argosy University has to offer. I feel I still have a lot to learn before I can achieve this goal. Yes, this goal is set a little high for me, because I expect to do good in my courses and I just feel like I am not understanding it very well. I am bad at when I set a goal I have to be the very best at what I do. I really hope to have my goal achieved by the time I finish this course. I can set smaller goals just by getting my assignments done in time and not rush around and do it all in one day. I’m not sure if I could rewrite my goal so it is not set to high or too low, because I am always wanting the best when it comes to doing my best in everything that I do. I need to manage my time a lot better than I have been. The benefits I will attain by the time I finish this course is that I will be better at communicating and understanding the computer a lot better than I do now.

Answer 1

In short, you can improve a wide range of things about your description.

• Firstly, you need to unify the text for it to be coherent as well as avoiding being redundant, for instance:

. In the beginning of your description you wrote “My goal is...”. My goal is...” . The problem is you repeated this phrase twice consecutively. Therefore, the best way you can avoid being redundant is by replacing the beginning of the second sentence with a pronoun: My goal is...”. It is very realistic...”.

. You also repeated “do” in: "My goal is to do the very best I can do in my classes...”. Here you can suppress the second “do” and the sentence won’t be redundant.

• On the other hand, regarding the assignment:

. The task says ”describe a goal for interpersonal improvement in your personal life”. What you did is describing a personal improvement, considering that “interpersonal” means “relating to relationships between people”. As a consequence, you need to rethink about your goal for improvement.

For example, you can describe how you can improve your interest in your classmates or colleagues or being more empathetic.