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I wrote this poem for English but the more I read it, the more I dislike it. I’d really like to fix the part I marked but I’m not really sure what I want to say or how I should say it. Could you help me please? Thank you

I wrote this poem for English but the more I read it, the more I dislike it. I’d really-example-1

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It’s a really great poem. They only thing you should fix is to have more details so it provides a better description so that the reader could understand better about what you are writing about.
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It looks good. I'm in AP English. You need a little bit more detail! But other that it looks good!
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