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Read the following passage either out loud or to yourself, looking for the following five mistakes: 1-fragment, 1-run-on sentence, 1-missing comma, 1-missing apostrophe, and 1- verb mistake. Rewrite the paragraph correctly and underline your corrections:

When a group of rare white lions arrived at the Philadelphia Zoo. It was an exciting event. The lions were the only ones of their kind in North America they soon became the zoo's most popular exhibit. The lions are native to southern Africa. They are so rare because of a problem caused by their unusual color. Most lions, with their golden-brown color, can sneak through grass and trees without being detected. But the moonlight shining on the white lions' coats make it difficult for them to hunt at night. Its too easy for other animals to see them. Therefore most white lions in the wild starve to death. Although all the white lions in Philadelphia are female, the zoo is hoping to get a white male soon and raise a family of white lion cubs.

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The but had to be removed.

A comma was added between zoo and it so that there wouldn't be a fragment.

An apostrophe was added between t and s in it's.

A comma was added between America and they for the run-on.

Read the following passage either out loud or to yourself, looking for the following-example-1