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My life was decent and financially stable. That changed not right away on that day, but it slowly transformed. At the start of that very day, right in the morning, I remembered. I was pretty sure it was my birthday. I checked the date, and it was indeed it was. Usually, I would wake up groggy and grumpy, but today was my day, for I was enlightened. I did my morning routines then drove to work at the Good Deals Grocery Store as the manager. I watched over the cashiers, monitoring the store. It was just a usual morning when my new coworker I had recently hired, Bill, approached me from behind.

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My life was decent and financially stable, but it slowly transformed. At the start of that very day, right in the morning, I had just remembered, that I was pretty sure it was my birthday! I checked the date, and it was indeed it was! Usually, I would wake up groggy and grumpy, but today was my day, for I was enlightened. I did my morning routines then drove to work at the Good Deals Grocery Store as the manager. I watched over the cashiers, monitoring the store. It was just a usual morning when my new coworker named Bill that I recently hired was approached me from behind.

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