Question

Read the passage below and answer the question that follows.

Children seem to like me, and I don't mind hanging out with them. It's pretty easy to keep them amused.





What is the best revision of this statement from the body of a cover letter?


Read the passage below and answer the question that follows.





Children seem to like me, and I don't mind hanging out with them. It's pretty easy to keep them amused.





What is the best revision of this statement from the body of a cover letter?Read the passage below and answer the question that follows.




No changes are needed.


Children seem to like me, and it's pretty easy to work with them.


I enjoy working with children and designing activities for them.


I have babysat for ten families and everyone says they like me best.

Answer 1

The best revision of the statement "Children seem to like me, and I don't mind hanging out with them. It's pretty easy to keep them amused" is:

Children seem to like me, and it's pretty easy to work with them.

This revision deletes the phrase "I don't mind hanging out with them", that phrase is not really necessary since it was already stated that children liked the person. It is logical that the person doesn't mind hanging out with someone who likes him/her. Also, the phrase "it's pretty easy to keep them amused" suggests that working with them is easy. At the end of the day, the key to work with children is being able to keep them amused, in other words, getting and keeping their attention.