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(1) Everybody knows that yard sales can be a waste of time. (2) However, all your preconceived notions about yard sales are about to change. (3) This will be the biggest, best, and cheapest yard sale you have ever seen. (4) Many people have yard sales. (5) You can’t afford to miss it!

Which sentence should you delete in order to make your advertisement more clear and concise? sentence 2 sentence 1 sentence 5 sentence 4

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Sentence 4.

That sentence is "choppy" compared to the rest and is very vague. It is also very abrupt, disrupting the flow of the sentence.

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Sentence number 4, because it disrupts the flow of the ad.
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