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This is what I have for my paper so far can someone peer review it?

On december 7 1941 pearl harbor was bombed, the us has been forced to join the war. On february 19 1942 president Franklin D. Roosevelt signs executive order 9066. Order 9066 gave the secretary of war the power to make camps to hold anyone he thinks could be planning on espionage or sabotage against the U.S. Henry Lewis Stimson the secretary of war during ww2 had made the decision for the safety of the american people to place people of japanese descent into camps for the duration of the war.


At the time of the war the american people thought the japanese should have stayed in the camp or go back to there home land, and today it is a bit of controversy on whether or not it was violating the the right of freedom that the american-japanese had loss to being placed in camps. My opinion is that yes they lose their freedom and rights they had as american but it was much better than what the american people would have done to them during the war.


If you don't see my point we can look at how they treated them once they were let free.

Before we go to what happened after we need to look at what happened to them after the bombing until order 9066 went through. During the day after the bombing of pearl harbor the FBI went and arrested 1,291 japanese community and religious leaders and froze there assets without any evidence(Japanese Internment Camps,2018). And we already violated there 4th amendment and not one day has passed yet.

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Great job on this paper! In the 3rd paragraph I would just look at that first sentence again. rewrite the sentence to make the reader recall what you are talking about "Before we go to what happened after_______,we need to look at what happened to ____ after the bombing"
That way it shows your instructor/ teacher you are a good writer that reiterates.
Good job!
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looks really good but change the us to either the United States or the U.S.
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