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Read the paragraph. (1) Owning a pet is popular in the United States. (2) For example, an estimated 83 million people own dogs and about 95 million own cats. (3) However, only about twenty percent of people choose to adopt their pet from a shelter. (4) Specifically, that’s about 3–4 million cats and dogs who are adopted each year from shelters. (5) Finally, 6–8 million enter shelters. Which transition in the paragraph should be revised? Revise “for example” at the beginning of Sentence 2. Revise “however” at the beginning of Sentence 3. Revise “specifically” at the beginning of Sentence 4. Revise “finally” at the beginning of Sentence 5.

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“Finally” at the beginning of sentence 5 because it makes no sense in the context of the previous sentence and the paragraph in general. Even thought it is the final sentence in the paragraph, the transition doesn’t work in this case.
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Answer:

4. Revise “finally” at the beginning of Sentence 5.

Step-by-step explanation:

Finally should be revised as its inconsistent with the order with which the writer has placed his points. If he had arranged the points with connectors such as firstly, secondly, then finally can be added to cap it all.

"for example" is correct because the trend of what mentioned before requires an analogy to buttress on the point

"However" is also correct which means "on the other hand". It depicts the other side of the thoughts that has been raised earlier.

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