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It's 3:30 PM, and Henry Jay Parker has arrived home at his house on 213 Buenavista Street. He opens his wooden front door and proceeds to enter his home. Mr. Parker places his golden keys on his desk and, a moment later takes a hot pocket out of the fridge. He heats the Hotpocket in the microwave and waits two minutes. Time is up, and Henry goes to his bedroom to watch the television. He skims through the channels until, at last, he stops at the cooking channel. He began to eat his hot pocket while he listened to and observed the chef's techniques and the recipe for cooking a perfect egg. Mr.Henry finally finishes his food only to realize his hunger has not been satisfied. 4:20 PM, Henry takes a nap and dreams that he is falling.
Henry wakes up screaming, his face is, drenched in sweat. Henry sighs in relief, and he says, "Thank god! It was just a dream." Henry gets up from his bed and goes to get a glass of water. Henry gets his glass of water, and he goes back up to his bedroom. He sits on his chair and watches the television once again, but he switches the channel to the news. He saw a news report about a man who ran away from a gunman who broke into his home. Henry watches the report with disgust, believing that the man in the report was a coward and not a real man. He mutters to himself, " I tell you what, no man gonna come into my house and put a darn gun to my head, and if he does, he gonna get one heck of a fight." He continues on his angry rant until at last, he goes to his fridge to get a soda. He takes his soda, then he pulls a cigar, and he, drinks, and smokes on his patio. He finishes his soda, and then he smokes another cigar. He checks the time and sees it is 8:30 PM, so he steps off his porch and, he goes back to his bedroom. Henry lies down on his bed, and he struggles to fall asleep. He rolls over, and he closes his eyes to no avail. 3:00 AM Henry has yet to fall asleep he is in a bitter mood. It's morning Henry didn't get any sleep, so he sets off to work in a bitter rage; he walks down the street and sees the mailman running from a white pit bull.
Henry is displeased by this sight and tells the mailman to stop being a coward and fight the pit bull. Henry continues walking until suddenly, he falls into a hole on the sidewalk. He lands at the bottom of the hole then to his dismay, a bulldozer fills the hole, with cement. Henry panics, and says, " Oh Christ how am I going to get out of here? if I don't get out of here a dead man." Henry realizes he has his cellphone but, chooses not to make a phone call because he refuses to go against his beliefs he would rather die a man than beg for help. Two days later a woman walks down a sidewalk she sees flies surrounding the sidewalk a nd she smells a foul odor then, two hours later, the police find the decaying body of Henry Jay Parker a foolish man who was blinded by his own pride.