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Does this poem sound good or bad?

Roses are red violets are blue The way you smile makes me swoon your eyes are bright your eyes they but I know you shall never be mine the days are gray the days are sad on the day that you have passed I wish I could tell you how I feel but you would only think of as unreal so today as I weep knowing you love me I can finally get some sleep....

User Anil Prz
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Answer:

Just add proper grammar!

Step-by-step explanation:

Look, it's a great poem don't get me wrong.

But proper punctuation and grammar is always a little bit more attractive and appealing to our eyes.

Let me run my eyes over it really quick and make any adjustments.

Final Draft:

Roses are red, violets are blue, The way you smile makes me swoon. Your eyes are bright, your eyes they are, but I know you shall never be mine. The days are gray, the days are sad, on the day that you have passed I wish I could tell you how I feel but you would only think of me as unreal. So today, as I weep, knowing you love me, I can finally get some sleep.

Glad I could help!!

User Mark Hobson
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