How can I make this paragraph better? Or what’s wring with it ?

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How can I make this paragraph better?
Or what’s wring with it ?

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Answer:

You could add more detail and use less fragments

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Answer:

in order to be a good writer, every benefit you list should start a new paragraph

Bhushan Teli answered Jan 20, 2020

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